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From Children of StarClan
Check Results - 1 October 2009
NAME HISTORY: Given the name Osiris of Mitternacht - The name structure suggests purebreed registration. Please clarify, as this isn't consistent with the character.
PERSONALITY
- but his standards tend to be a bit higher than the average so far as that is concerned - Unless you can provide me evidence that an 'average' is even something we can make concrete I can't really let an absolute like this, which forces other characters to have certain standards in relationship to your character's standards, go through.
- Naturally though, he’ll take your compliment, but do not anticipate getting any favors from him for it. - Telling others how to respond to your character, or what they should and should not expect, is powerplaying.
APPEARANCE
- With long, spindly limbs he is a tall tom. This tall physique is taunt with muscle, broadening his previously lithe structure to one of bulk, though his legs remain still somewhat slender in their lower sections, providing him a swift method to move around. - I'm completely and utterly fuzzy on what he is and isn't. There's history mixed in with actual current appearance, so you'll need to sort that out.
- The hue of his eyes can vary depending on how the light hits it at certain angles. - Eyes cannot change color.
HISTORY
- took pity on the Two Leg - Twoleg is inconsistent with the vernacular of a cat clearly embroiled in human culture.
NOTES: I'm not really sure that they're appropriate where they are... Parts of it seems duplicitous of parts of the history. Other parts seem to belong in the personality... I suggest spending some time thinking on if they're even necessary outside of the fields where they might be better fits, and consider if things might be better worked into those locations.
As always, send any questions my way.
Recvoery
Sorry for not responding to the activity check, but I wasn't aware that there was a specific one for non-clan cats. I have been active with this character over the previous moon in four threads in Whitehart (Walking in a Winter Wonderland/Diary of a Memory/Up on the Housetop/Tell Me What the Day Knows). I would very much like to recovery this character and I'll make sure to keep my eyes peeled for future non-clan character activity checks.