Shardclaw/Archive 1

Check Results - 18 December 2010

PERSONALITY

• he never voices his disagreements, is prone to challenge others' opinions, & is also the type who doesn't like to conceal his feelings - I feel like the first fragment conflicts with the second and third. He doesn't vocally disagree but apparently others know he does and he openly challenges others? You'll want to address that and figure out how that statement works with the second two.
• Despite his flaws in his personality, - Mild powerplay.

APPEARANCE

• The black patches make his large pale eyes seem sharper and more focused then usual - Powerplay. You can't tell others what his eyes seem like to their characters.
• Save for the obsidian tip gracing the end of his long lashing tail - So his tail does nothing but lash?
• Shardclaw's claws are often extended even when he is not fighting and they are almost unusually long and sharp - This makes no sense. If you look at the anatomy of a cat's foot you'll see that they must tighten the muscles and tendons of the paw to extend their claws. This means it would be impossible for them to be extended at all times. And even worse, if he's walking around on his claws, they'd be as dull and useless as a dogs'!
• His eyes . . . usually have an eerie disconnected calm - Powerplay.

HISTORY: Missing everything after being made a warrior - You need to fill in the missing 32 moons that are not included in his history. This might include researching some back RP and making things up. You might even have to visit the old archive site!

Any questions just let me know.  Kitsufox  ^{Fox's Den} 10:41, 19 December 2010 (CST)

Easement Warning - 4 January 2011

You have 24 hours in which to do one of the following:

• Resume working on your eased character
• File a Leave of Absence (LOA) / Update an existing, expired LOA
• Contact Kitsu to discuss the situation that is interfering with your progress.

Failure to take one of these actions will result in the character being returned to the pool of those that are adoptable.

 Kitsufox  ^{Fox's Den} 09:35, 4 January 2011 (CST)

Followup

An extension has been made that will give the player until 31 January 2011.  Kitsufox  ^{Fox's Den} 10:36, 8 January 2011 (CST)