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Revision as of 06:10, 16 May 2017
Quick Suggestion from Fae
Appearance
- "He appears uniform black while still, but . . ."
- The wording on this can be rather confusing, since 'while' can be used to mean different things. I think a minor change in wording would do wonders for clarifying for readers.
- May I suggest saying uniform black when still, or while he's still / not moving, etc.? ;D
- Fae~o~the~Wind (talk) 06:09, 16 May 2017 (UTC)