Fogdancer

Check Results - 16 August 2008 (PM)

• 19 Moons of Age: This age is currently banned for use in all clans.
• Fogdancer is loyal: What is and isn't perceivable as loyal varies from cat to cat, making this a powerplay of sorts. It either needs to be quantified to apply to just the character itself, or changed so that it does not force the players of other characters to have theirs interpret yours as loyal.
• has a rather thin tail: This makes the tail abnormal, and you do not currently qualify for a heavy restriction item (no approved characters). Tail abnormalities are also completely banned for ShadowClanners.
• There is a set of three fine scars across her right flank as well: For scars to be visible through the thick fur of the thigh, they would have to be rather large. No limb or disability resulted?
• did well at most tasks set to her . . . and was often praised for it: Who praised? You need to be more specific just to avoid implied powerplays.
• A serious flaw, though, was that she was reluctant to harm another cat. Her mentor tried his hardest to rid her of that, saying it was a weakness that would get her killed, but she resisted quietly until he gave up. I doubt even a cat like Whitestar would make a Warrior of a cat who refused to do battle. (We'll attend to outside permissions after we get everything else ironed out, just to avoid pestering Kole before we know for sure this will even remain in the history).
• Her mentor glossed over the fact that she had no desire to fight, and she was made a warrior at the same time as her two brothers: How? All the cats live stuffed together in a tiny camp. Apprentices, when they're older, are sent on patrols without their mentors (though still with more experienced cats).
• She managed to hide her averseness to violence until a day when a ThunderClan ambush caught her patrol on the Southplains.: There has been no combat, barring a few very specific incidents, since the Markedkit Prophecy began in the Moon of the Markedkit. A very tense peace has characterized the modern period in the clans.
• Full-Blooded Siblings: Leapingflame (living): Keep in mind that by naming him you've made getting him adopted out a million times harder, and he will not be permitted to remain alive (or even retain the name) unless a player is found for him in an effort to avoid the removal of names from the list of those that are usable.

 Kitsufox  ^{Fox's Den} 04:13, 17 August 2008 (UTC)

Check Results - 17 August 2008

GENERAL

• Age - 18 Moons is specifically banned for ShadowClan. Please consult the aged based bans section of the Bans List, where ou will find a section that applies to our character's clan, and to all clan cats.
• Born - Please add 'Moon of' to the field.

PERSONALITY

• Fogdancer is likes to think herself courageous - It looks like you changed your mind about what you were saying midsentence. Please edit.

 Kitsufox  ^{Fox's Den} 13:40, 18 August 2008 (UTC)

Approval Notes

The following characters will need NPC Sheets: Whispermist, Dawnleaf, & Graycloud.  Kitsufox  ^{Fox's Den} 15:16, 18 August 2008 (UTC)